Blue Moon February

[Dead-Beat-Nick]

I finished the first draft of my short story about the farmer and the moon. It's wild and exciting!! It's too big as a pdf for the attachments though so if you know of a better way to do it, let me know. I can email anyone interested in reading it. 7000 words (on the dot).

[The Dan Sandwich]

You know what else is too large for a PDF?



...An elephant. An elephant is too big for a PDF.

[Dead-Beat-Nick]

True, elephants are BIG.

Here it is, 12 pages of imagery that tells a story. I couldn't think of a way to successfully end it all quarter until recently it hit me. Enjoy!

[pies]

Nick Its really good I'll finish reading tonight or tomorrow.

[The Dan Sandwich]

Wait, you can read? Or does your beard read aloud to you?

[Dead-Beat-Nick]

Shave your beard, become illiterate.

[Dead-Beat-Nick]

I read through again and I think in another draft I'll push the characters of Jim and Ed Miller more. My subconscious must've written the two characters as the Id and the Superego to Bill's ego. I was reading Civilization and It's Discontents by Freud while writing parts of this and themes of a discontent society that finds the sky to be hostile? I like finding meaning in a pile of sticks that gravity took a hold of. Meaning in everything.

[Righteous]

Wow Nick, I absolutely loved it.
But only in the artistic, wordy perspective. I think most readers would have a difficult time extracting the true meanings out of those long-winded paragraphs. Actually, that is exactly why it took me so long to read and enjoy. I am not an everyday reader but luckily, I have a well-developed vocabulary.
Another thing is, I started to notice a descriptive-phrasing pattern. Which is okay, I mean, you are showing traits of a great writer, but too much can be a problem.
You captured the story very well and it's exactly how I pictured everything when we first discussed the idea. I think it came up randomly, as well (which is usually what makes a story great)!
Awesome job!

[Dead-Beat-Nick]

Interesting. I haven't read much of what writers are doing today, so I'm guessing they're willing to make their stories clear for the public to enjoy, but the average reader won't find the meaning regardless. If a reader needs an English dictionary, then they should get one, it's an important read for anyone that speaks the language.
Then again, a book has plenty of leeway to make meaning out of all those pages. I put an endless palette of meanings in this. Maybe it's religious, maybe it's social, maybe it's psychological, or maybe it's just a simple homage to the simple farmer in the context of something complex. Whatever you get out of it, the idea that the story is the vague part and the meaning behind everything is all I discuss and what I want in it. I treated this like a screenplay. Every paragraph is between beats of a scene, every sentence is a shot, and every word is a production value behind each sentence/shot.

EDIT: I do recall taking a shot at today's literature and stories where Jim Brown's "Philistine fiction" comes in. I also took a shot at a lot of things.

[Righteous]

You know what else is too large for a PDF?



...An elephant. An elephant is too big for a PDF.

I beg to differ...

Elephant.pdf (http://www.wabuf.com/MISCMEDIA/OTHERIMAGES/Elephant.pdf)
:p

[The Dan Sandwich]

Touche....